Wow I gotta say I love the concept. My only criticism is that it felt rushed, your ideas were really good and what you've already shown could have been embellished more and i think you would've had at least 3-4 episodes instead of just one. Again I loved what you did and really want to see where you take the story but I wouldn't mind waiting longer if it meant getting more story at a less rushed pace. like drawing out the relationship between Takana and Ben instead of bam your in a relationship. 5*****
Thank you very much for your words. I can really use constructive criticism and am also happy to implement new ideas. To be honest, I wasn't sure whether deeper aspects would be of interest at all. For example, I thought about whether it would be useful to go more into a moral dilemma that Ben might face. Because Takara is a difficult character, she is merciless and full of anger. Only with Ben does she behave like a normal girl. The question, however, is how Ben will cope in the long term with having a relentless killing machine for a girlfriend or what he could do to free Takara from this anger. He's just a simple country boy and might wonder if they've both become a couple too quickly and if they're even right for each other.... As I said, I wasn't sure if there was interest in adding much more depth to the story. So I'm very grateful for your feedback!
I can't speak for everyone, just myself, but the Adult in 'AVN' doesn't just mean sex. It also means Adult situations and concepts. For example a movie can be rated R and never have any sex scenes. Some of the best AVNs are heavy on being story driven, for example 'My Bully Is My Lover', great AVN and VERY story driven. Again i love what you have but I'm greedy lol I want more ;). Now this is just a thought but seeing as your still at the beginning you could very easily start over and remake the first episode, but again that's just a thought.
Yes, I agree with your opinion on AVNs. I feel the same way and I'll keep it in mind. As for Takara and Ben, it's important for the progression of my story that they are a couple. That's why it happened so quickly between them, firstly because it will have to do with the wishing well and secondly because I want to go into the problems the two of them still have ahead of them... But I won't give too much away now. In any case, I'm really looking forward to your feedback when episode two is finished. I'm sure it'll be another three months before then, but I'd rather deliver a finished product. :-)
I just created a transgender character for episode 2 today, so I can say that trans will be present. Also femdom. Other than that, I'll let myself be surprised by what else I come up with, because I'm still writing the script on the side while creating the new scenes for episode 2.
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Im already excited for the next part as much as i get excited for new episodes of solo leveling.
Wow I gotta say I love the concept. My only criticism is that it felt rushed, your ideas were really good and what you've already shown could have been embellished more and i think you would've had at least 3-4 episodes instead of just one. Again I loved what you did and really want to see where you take the story but I wouldn't mind waiting longer if it meant getting more story at a less rushed pace. like drawing out the relationship between Takana and Ben instead of bam your in a relationship. 5*****
Thank you very much for your words. I can really use constructive criticism and am also happy to implement new ideas. To be honest, I wasn't sure whether deeper aspects would be of interest at all. For example, I thought about whether it would be useful to go more into a moral dilemma that Ben might face. Because Takara is a difficult character, she is merciless and full of anger. Only with Ben does she behave like a normal girl. The question, however, is how Ben will cope in the long term with having a relentless killing machine for a girlfriend or what he could do to free Takara from this anger. He's just a simple country boy and might wonder if they've both become a couple too quickly and if they're even right for each other.... As I said, I wasn't sure if there was interest in adding much more depth to the story. So I'm very grateful for your feedback!
I can't speak for everyone, just myself, but the Adult in 'AVN' doesn't just mean sex. It also means Adult situations and concepts. For example a movie can be rated R and never have any sex scenes. Some of the best AVNs are heavy on being story driven, for example 'My Bully Is My Lover', great AVN and VERY story driven. Again i love what you have but I'm greedy lol I want more ;). Now this is just a thought but seeing as your still at the beginning you could very easily start over and remake the first episode, but again that's just a thought.
Yes, I agree with your opinion on AVNs. I feel the same way and I'll keep it in mind.
As for Takara and Ben, it's important for the progression of my story that they are a couple. That's why it happened so quickly between them, firstly because it will have to do with the wishing well and secondly because I want to go into the problems the two of them still have ahead of them... But I won't give too much away now. In any case, I'm really looking forward to your feedback when episode two is finished. I'm sure it'll be another three months before then, but I'd rather deliver a finished product. :-)
What future tags are you planning dev? Harem? ntr/sharing? Pregnancy? futa/trans? femdom?
I just created a transgender character for episode 2 today, so I can say that trans will be present. Also femdom. Other than that, I'll let myself be surprised by what else I come up with, because I'm still writing the script on the side while creating the new scenes for episode 2.